I have been learning how to put details in my writing, but the hard part is that it was difficult to try to make sense, the good part is that I used higher words, I need to stop using trash words.

The Olympic Underwater Hurdles         

Today I did a underwater hurdle but this time I was racing with six larger men and women. It was a great day my heart was pounding very slowly that time it’s a very hot hot day. So my best friend planned to do a underwater racing day under the sea. It was so far where we were there were a lot of fish I thought to myself “I guess this is where the reef is”. Then my hand’s were wobbly and my legs were shaking very much because I never got the chance to even sit down I struggled to stand back up because I had got stuck in some seaweed. I tried to escape but it made it worst my best friend  knew that I was not coming up so she brought a knife just in case. She saw me underwater because she popped her head in. She suited herself up. She put her flipper’s on. She knew that I never had enough oxygen to breath in. I screamed “Help help” she came down and cut the seaweed with her knife then I gobbled up some water. When I reached the top I saw the sunlight appear it was so beautiful sunset my best friend yelled “this is madness” but she yelled in the water lucky for that. Then I started to stretch out in the water but I came third place. The sea was bright blue, the fish in the reef was shining lightly and brightly then it was time for a nap. I woke up feeling sore and pain from underwater they told me in a manly voice “Because you came third you need to do another one tomorrow”I asked myself “Why” and it was now time for sleep.

A holiday I didn't do

   What I learnt today was that your not aloud to use trash words and that you need to put punctuation in. what I created is a holiday I didn't do so to make sure if it did happen I put it up. I shared it with everyone in the world to maybe have an idea of a new story. I liked that it was a great start.  


  Rainbow’s end.

1. When we went to rainbow's end.
2. We all went on the roller coaster.
3. The rainbow end  had closed.

Today I traveled to Rainbow end my mum, dad, C.j came along. We all were enjoying our candy floss it was amazing then we walked over to the baby section to watch C.j on the roller coaster mum laid eyes on her. It was funny when she finally finished it was hilarious then we headed over to have lunch it was delicious then we saw a family riding the biggest roller coaster even the little child wasn't scared   ridding it my mum said “wow that child is brave even c.j can handle that.” I said “that might be she could be scared” so well we all had a try.